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Post by Totodile PWNs on Apr 6, 2007 15:44:15 GMT -5
5/5 3rd chapter. 5/5 2nd chapter 4/5 1st chapter 4/5 Prolouge. A 4.5 /5 over all. good fic.
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Post by Pikafan on Apr 6, 2007 16:08:13 GMT -5
Thanks Totodile. Now here's Chapter 4!
Chapter 4 - The Great Escape. Or is it?
We leave off our heroes running away from the hole in the floor where Totodile went to defeat those pokemon. As they are running away, they see 2 doorways, one on the left and one on the right. The left and right have no light. "May, I think we should split up. Add me on your PokeNav and we'll call each other if we find the exit. You take the right and I'll take the left." Chris said. He pulled out an electronic that looked like an advanced phone. He registered May and she registered him. "Good luck, Chris." May said. Chris nodded, meaning "You too" and ran down the left path. May ran down the right path. Both thought they were going to find the exit, but they did not know that they were heading the wrong way... Chris was walking down the path. It seemed he would be wandering forever on this path. Soon the light faded away and it became very dark. He could not see anything, even when he looked back from where he came from. So he grabbed a pokeball from his belt and through it. Out came electrike though the flashing light. She looked around and could not see Chris, but she heard him say, "Electrike, use Discharge and hold it! It will light up the path for us." Electrike began to release energy, but only a little bit. It made enough light for them to see ahead. He kept on walking and saw a doorway up ahead. That might be the exit! He thought. So he began to run toward it. When he took a step, he accidentally hit a switch! The switch was a trap! Suddenly, a bunch of Level 10 Dustox and Beautifly began to fly down from the ceiling! They were glowing because they were shiny, and their luster gave them light to see Chris. He sent out his Zigzagoon and Poochyena and began to engage them in a battle. In total, there were 7 pokemon, 3 Dustox and 4 Beautifly. "Electrike, use a Crunch attack on a Dustox! Zigzagoon, use a Tail Whip attack! Poochyena, use a Howl attack!" Chris yelled to his pokemon. Electrike jumped up in the air and snapped at Dustox with her teeth. She hang on and kept biting the Dustox. The bug type pokemon flew around, swirling to try and get Electrike off of it. "Don't let go and keep biting!" Chris said. As he said that, Zigzagoon shook his tail at all of the pokemon. All of their defenses were lowered a notch. Poochyena then howled and raised his attack. All of the Dustox and beautifly began to shoot string all over the place, lowering the speed of Zigzagoon and Poochyena about 3 notches. Dustox1: 21/40 Chris screamed to his pokemon, "Electrike! Now use a Discharge! Make Dustox fly toward the other pokemon and then use it! Zigzagoon and Poochyena, return!" He took out their pokeballs and returned his pokemon. Red lights hit the 2 pokemon and returned them to their pokeballs. Chris then ran and ducked. Electrike steered Dustox over to the 6 other pokemon. The bug pokemon stared at Dustox for a minute, then began to flutter over and help. When they all gathered, Electrike released a big boom of electricity that hit all of the pokemon. The Dustox Electrike was on fell to the ground, fainted, while the other pokemon fell to the ground, paralyzed. They all fell with a big THUD! "Now's my chance! Go, Pokeballs!" Chris said, and tossed a pokeball at a Dustox that was paralyzed and one at a Beautifly that was paralyzed. The pokeballs sucked the bug type pokemon inside and landed on the ground with a little thud. They began to roll and shake. After what seemed like a minute, the pokeballs stopped, meaning a successful capture. Chris then continued on ahead, returning electrike. He ran to the doorway and found himself in a maze! It was a grass maze. The walls were green hedges made to seem like walls. Right when Chris took a step, a hedge was set on fire. Chris said, "Waah!" and jumped back, surprised by the fire. Then the fire was cooled down by a jet of water. When Chris got up, he saw May and Totodile! May ran over and hugged Chris, happy to see him. "May! Totodile! How did you guys get here?" Chris said. "Well, I just ran ahead and fought a Shiny Beedrill and Butterfree, which I caught. Totodile then came on my path because he defeated some guys then had his totodile used Water gun to shoot him up to the hole in the ceiling. He met up with me here and we came into this maze." May said. "So, now what do we do?" "I guess we just have to get out of this maze by keep doing what we did." Little did the trainers know that a great pokemon was in the center of the Maze... As they continued moving forward, May stepped on a booby trap! A bunch of spikes fell from the ceiling, hitting them and piercing their skin. The trainers were in pain from the horrible, metal spikes. "I hope these aren't rusty," Totodile said. "Lucky they aren't." May replied. Torchic and totodile were hit by the spikes, too, and took some damage. The trainers then moved a little bit more when they felt an Earthquake! The ground opened up under them and they fell in the hole! Totodile grabbed onto the ledge and May grabbed onto Totodile's hand. Chris grabbed onto May's hand. "Hold on guys, don't let go!" Totodile screamed to May and Chris. Totodile began to lose his grip on the ledge... "May, Totodile. I'm holding you down. Go and save yourselves. I'll be alright." Chris said. "NO! Don't let go!" May and Totodile said. "I'm sorry. Save yourselves..." Chris replied. He leg go of May's hand. Totodile and May screamed, "CHRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIS!" He fell down into the giant hole... What will our heroes do now? Will they survive this?
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Post by Totodile PWNs on Apr 6, 2007 16:20:10 GMT -5
Intresting story pikafan. 5/5 again. Wonder how they'll get out this wierd place.
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Post by Pikafan on Apr 6, 2007 16:21:36 GMT -5
It might take a while, I'm planning about 3-5 more chapters in here. Maybe 2.
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Post by Totodile PWNs on Apr 6, 2007 16:30:26 GMT -5
Cool. So May has a shiny beedrill, a shiny butterfree, a zizagoon, and a torchic. You have a shiny dustox,a poochyena, a zizagoon, and an electike.
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Post by Pikafan on Apr 6, 2007 16:53:20 GMT -5
I also have a shiny Beautifly.
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Post by Totodile PWNs on Apr 6, 2007 17:10:46 GMT -5
Really? Cool.
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Post by Pikafan on Jun 2, 2007 7:47:18 GMT -5
NOTICE TO ALL:
I have to stop my fic for now. My laptop is broken and that's where I have some good chapters, so I need to get it fixed first.
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Archmage Warlic
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my sigs awesome man no one take it or else and guess what i made it my self
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Post by Archmage Warlic on Jun 8, 2007 16:49:14 GMT -5
ok this is Awesome Q a)how do you join ? can anyone join ?
Q b)do you use the pokemon in your profile ?
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Post by Pikafan on Oct 26, 2007 14:36:24 GMT -5
I'm sorry to everyone, but I am going to stop this fic. I have become bored with it, and I forgot all of my ideas and the 2 chapters I had written for it. While I was thinking about this, I was planning another Fic. I am going to post the Prologue for it soon, maybe today. But anyways, I am done with this.
*closed*
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